2022年新高考1卷满分作文赏析

2022年高考英语新高考I卷(适用地区：山东、广东、福建、江苏、湖南、湖北、河北)

假定你是校广播站英语节目“Talk and Talk”的负责人李华，请给外教Caroline写邮件邀请她做一次访谈。内容包括：

1.节目介绍；

2.访谈的时间和话题。

注意：

1.写作词数应为80左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Dear Caroline, Yours sincerely,Li Hua

试题解读：

邀请信是最常见的邮件写作之一。同学们在日常练习中经常接触到，也练习过相关类型的作文。构思短文时，首先应该认真审题，确定内容要点数量，要详细介绍活动的具体内容或安排，告知被邀请者需要做哪些方面的准备。为了使短文内容更加翔实，更丰富，应在命题给出的写作要求的基础上，充分发散思维，补充细节，使短文更加饱满，也更有说服力。因此在最后一段应该表明期待与感谢，在组织语句时，适当加入高级词汇和复合句，使描述的内容更加准确。

写作信息要点：

(1)写信背景；

(2)写信目的

(3)详细介绍节目；

(4)对方应该做哪些准备；

(5)表达感激之情，并期待对方的尽快回复。

注意事项：

(1)注意邀请函的行文格式和语气；

(2)注意补充细节，适当加入过渡句，使短文内容丰富且连贯；

(3)注意使用高级词汇，高级句型以提升作文档次；

(4)注意书写规范，保持卷面干净。

满分范文一

Dear Caroline,

I`m Li hua, the person in charge of the English program “Talk and Talk” in the school radio station. I`m writing to sincerely invite to as a guest of our program to do an interview.

This program, which was founded in 2016, aims to provide students with a good English communication platform, share their school life, and listen to teachers` professional guidance on English learning. The theme of this interview is “how to learn English well”. The interview is scheduled for 6 p.m. this Friday in our school`s radio station.

We would appreciate it if you could accept our sincerely invitation. I`m looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely

Lihua

点评：

短文采用了经典的三段式写作手法，即首段介绍自己和邮件目的；中段是短文主体，充分发散思维，详细介绍了节目的主旨，主题和时间，末段表达了感激和期待，简洁明了，完美收官。行文方面，复杂句式和高级词汇的运用使短文表达方式多样化，更具有吸引力，同时彰显了出色的写作能力和深厚的语法功底。

好词好句赏析：

1. in charge of 负责；

2. Aim to do sth.旨在做某事；

3. I would appreciate it if you could do sth.如果你能做某事，我将不胜感激。

译文：

我是李华，学校广播站英语节目“谈一谈”的负责人。我写信是想诚挚地邀请你作为我们节目的嘉宾做一次访谈。

该广播节目创办于2016年，旨在为学生提供一个良好的英语交流平台，分享他们的学校生活，聆听老师们对于英语学习的专业指导。本次采访的主题是“如何学好英语”。访谈定于本周五下午6点在我校广播站进行。

如果你能接受我们真挚的邀请，我们将不胜感激。期待您的回复。

满分范文二：

Dear Caroline,

I am Lihua, the host of the English program “Talk and Talk” in the school radio station. I sincerely invite you to accept our interview.

As an interview program, we often invite special guests to share their opinions on various topics, which is basically about students` study and school life. It is deeply welcomed by the students. This time we would like to invite you to offer some suggestions on English learning to our audience. I believe your guidance will benefit the students a lot. The interview is scheduled for Saturday morning at 8 a.m. in the school radio room.

I would be grateful if you could come. I`m looking forward to your soon reply.

Yours sincerely

Lihua

点评：

内容方面，通过巧妙的构思和布局，将命题所给写作要点悉数覆盖，做到了要点无遗漏。其中，细节的补充使短文内容丰富，逻辑性强，极具说服力。行文方面，As引导的伴随状语，which引导的非限定性定语从句，I believe (that)…引导的宾语从句等复合句频现，避免了单一句式重复使用所产生的枯燥感，彰显出了深厚的写作功底和扎实的语法知识。满分佳作，实至名归。

好词好句赏析：

1. share opinions on…分享有关…的观点；

2. Benefit (sb) a lot (让某人)受益颇多；

3. I would be grateful if you could do sth.如果你能做某事，我将不胜感激。

译文：

我是李华，学校广播电台英语节目“谈一谈”的主持人。我诚挚地邀请您接受我们的访谈。

作为一个访谈节目，我们经常邀请特别嘉宾就各种话题分享意见。访谈的话题基本关于学生的学习和生活，深受同学们欢迎。这次我们想邀请您向听众提供一些关于英语学习的建议。我相信您的指导定能使同学们受益匪浅。采访定于周六上午8点在学校广播室进行。

如您能来参加，我将不胜感激。期待您的回复。

第二节（满分25分）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest.

I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasnt with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.

What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!

I quickly searched the crowd for the schools coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."

I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well-he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.

David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer -thats all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the David faced and was school, I was familiar with the challenges the challenges proud of his strong determination.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

We sat down next to each other, but David wouldnt look at me. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.

试题解读：

构思此篇续写时，首先要读懂原文大意，考虑故事的发展要符合逻辑，人物的心理变化要合理。建议第一段重点写自我安慰，鼓励或开到David的话，然后时David听了我的劝告后的心理变化。行文时要突出文章的画面感，同时要注意补充细节内容，即——读短文就能想到谈话时的场景，以及谈后的变化，使故事的发展合乎情理。第二段要重点描述现场的比赛氛围和David的表现。同时，要留意观众们的表现，即没有观众嘲笑他，反而是持久的欢呼声和加油声，从侧面突出David参赛的正确性。短文将David此时的神态与前文他犹豫不决，踌躇不自信的神态对比鲜明，从而彰显了人性之美，传递了正能量。结尾处描述David赛后的表现或者我对其比赛的表现的感想是短文的点睛之笔。

写作信息要点：

(1)我鼓励David，使他相信自己应该试一试；

(2)重点突出David听了我的话之后的变化；

(3)现场紧张的比赛氛围，以及David的出色表现；

(4)通过观众的欢呼声和加油声，鼓励David.

(5)点睛之笔，简写感想。

注意事项：

(1)人物对话要符合逻辑，鼓励的语言要有感染力；

(2)David心理路程的转变要符合逻辑及人物性格；

(3)注意比赛场的细节描写，如欢呼声，加油声；

(4)传递正能量！尽管David是最后一名，但给人以积极向上的精神慰藉。

满分范文一：

We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn`t look at me. Judging from his expression, it was evident that he was trapped in a dilemma. “All of us think you are the best,” I tried to give him some comfort. Hearing these words, he turned around with tears in his eyes. “I know you do. But the kids from other school…” “Child, it`s not important. You can change them with your efforts,” I cuddled him. “The only question is whether you have the courage to try.” He raised his head, bit his lips and nodded firmly. “Good, just do it.” I patted him on the shoulder .He grinned as usual.

I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. As the starting gun rang out, David and the other runners began to run. His small body rocked from side to side as he swung his feet forward. His legs were trembling and drops of sweat were running down his cheeks. he held his fists, gritted his teeth and kept running. When he finished the race, although he was the last, everyone cheered for him. For others, this is just a simple cross-country run. But for David ,this is a challenge to break through himself. I`m glad he did it.

点评：

运用了一系列动词，如raised, bit, nodded, raised his head 等给人以画面感，增强文章的感染力，将大卫的形态，心理变化生动地展现在读者面前，表达效果非常好。行文方面，Judging from his expression, Hearing these words等过渡性句子运用使文章过渡自然，行文连贯，不仅增强了文章的可读性，而且提升了英文特有的美感和质感。多种复合句式的使用凸显了深厚的写作功底和语言组织能力。故事方面更是无可挑剔，故事的发展合乎逻辑，真是自然。满分佳作，值得推荐。

好词好句赏析：

1. judging from…根据…来判断；

2. It is evident that…显然…；

3. Be trapped in a dilemma.陷入两难境地；

4. Cheer for 为……欢呼/加油；

5. Break through突破；

译文：

我们紧挨着坐，但大卫不直视我。从他的表情来看，他显然陷入了两难之地。“大家都认为你是最棒的。”我尝试着安慰他。听到这些，他转过头来，眼中闪着泪花。“我知道你们是这么想的，但其他学校的同学们……”“孩子，那不重要，你可以用你的努力改变他们，”我拥抱着他，“现在的问题是你是否有勇气去尝试。”他抬起头，咬着嘴唇，坚定地点了点头。“很好！就这么做吧。”我拍了拍他的肩膀。他像往常一样咧着嘴笑了。

我注视着大卫和其他选手一起来到了起跑线上。随着发令枪响，大卫和其他选手开始跑起来。他弱小的身体随着他的脚步左右摇晃着向前冲去。他的腿在颤抖，汗水顺着脸颊流了下来。他握着拳头，咬紧牙关继续跑。当比赛结束，尽管他是最后一名，但同学们都为他欢呼起来。对于其他人来说，这只是一次简单的越野跑。但对大卫来说，这是一次突破自我的挑战。我很高兴，他做到了。

满分范文二：

We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn`t look at me. “I know that you are eager to join the race,” I said to him. “but you care about what others think. Listen Boy, the most important thing now is not what others think ,but what you should do. Just follow your heart.” Obviously, he was touched by my words. He thought for a while ,then nodded slowly, stood up firmly, and walked to the starting line like a brave soldier.

I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. He looks confident, his eyes are firm, and he seems to be full of strength. The race started and David run forward as hard as he could. Although his running posture is very special, the crowd did not laugh at him. They broke out in a loud cheer to cheer for him. In fact, even if he was the last one to cross the finish line, I know he is happy. Because the excited smile on his face proved that he was proud of the race. David came over to me, and said, “Thank you, teacher. Your encouragement made me realize the meaning of struggle and persistence.” I didn`t say a word, just applauded with emotion.

点评：

两段续写都完美承接了提示句，语句过度极其自然，流畅。行文上，一系列动词的使用，使文章画面感十足，增强故事的感染力。关联词或过渡语句的运用则使文章行文连贯，且长短句的搭配使用使文章读起来抑扬顿挫，英语特有的质感得以完美体现。最后通过大卫的感言使文章得以升华，有歌颂真善美，传递正能量的意义。同时，段落最后营造的场景给人以很强的画面感，结尾温馨又感人，总之，本篇使非常出色的续写佳作。

好词好句赏析：

1. …not…but…不是…而是…；

2. Realize the meaning of…意识到…的意义；

译文：

我们紧挨着坐，但大卫不直视我。“我知道你内心是渴望参赛的，”我对他说，“但你在意别人的看法。听着，孩子！现在最重要的不是别人怎么看，而是你应该做么做。遵循自己的内心吧。”很显然，他被我的话触动了。他沉思了一会儿，然后缓缓点点头，坚定地站起来，像一个勇敢的战士一样走向起跑线。

我注视着大卫和其他选手一起来到起跑线上。他看起来充满自信，目光坚定，似乎浑身充满力量。比赛开始，大卫努力向前奔跑。尽管他的跑步姿势很特殊，但观众们并没有嘲笑他，而是爆发出热烈的欢呼声为他加油。事实上，即使他是最后一个冲过终点线的，我知道他是开心的。因为他脸上兴奋的笑容证明了他为这场比赛感到骄傲。大卫来到我身旁，喘着气说，“谢谢老师，您的鼓励使我认识到奋斗和坚持的意义。”我一句话也没说，只是感动地鼓掌。